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It's just a paragraph from my story, I need someone's opinion please....

She knew she would have trouble tightening the corset. James sneaked up behind her and helped her. She jumped but when she heard his mind musing a million thoughts, she just relaxed and let him tighten the bodice.
“ Ouch!” She said when he clenched the strings too tight. He apologized by kissing her neck. She felt a funny feeling go through her, making her almost fall over.
“ It’s better when you don’t think about it.” James spun her around to face him. She stared at him with teary eyes. He caressed her pallid cheek with his frigid soft hand. He wiped her fresh tears away and stared back at her with impenetrable eyes and an inscrutable countenance, that she didn’t recognize. She kissed his hand that still held her cheek firmly, and thats when he felt a spark of seduction go through him like an electric current. He wanted to just rip her beautiful dress off right there and bite into her neck gently, but actuality hit them both. He pulled away and darted out the room, shielding his mind. She wanted to call after him and but didn’t. She walked over to the vanity and braided her hair into a bun you would see the women who sing opera wear. She clipped an hair decoration onto the side of her curly hair and reached for the sparkly dark diamond necklace. She took off her locket and sat it neatly by the other jewelry. She fastened the necklace. She sprayed the lovely scented perfume onto her neck and it mixed with her own. She rubbed dark red lipstick onto her pale lips and stared at the stranger staring back at her. She stood and walked over to the bed and grabbed her masquerade mask. She tied the back of the mask, making sure it wasn’t to fall off, and walked out of the boudoir and down the long stairwell.